Analysis Commentary
on the two bloggers on Abortion
I
have chosen to speak about the controversy behind abortion and although i share
personal views, I have created two characters that are looking to express their
feelings on Abortion and I will analyse both. They are both unknown members of
the public who are blogging for the first time about their feelings on the
controversy surrounding abortion. The form of the two blogs is a persuasive
article in a section of a local newspaper. The audience that these views are
received by is people who have purchased the newspaper and viewed the pages
where these blogs on abortion controversy are.
The
first character Lucy is a 20 year old woman who is looking to express her
feelings on abortion and explains how she has actually experienced the full
force of an abortion as a sixteen year old girl. The other character is a 47
year old called John Staples whose profession is being a doctor.
As
soon as both bloggers start it becomes obvious who is more comfortable and used
to writing in this manner. John Staples seems more sophisticated and
comfortable with the use of vocabulary being used. Lucy on the other hand does
not come across as completely less confident but less comfortable than John.
Because of the fact John is a doctor he does seem quite fair at the start of
the blog saying his view could be disagreed with the fact it’s okay if the
women 'health is at risk' which is clearly understandable as
his profession means he thinks safety is the most important thing. The use of
vocabulary and the fact all of his blog makes sense, gives me the view that
John is higher academically than Lucy which is also supported by the fact he’s
a doctor. Because of the high level of grammar and punctuation Johns view seems
very persuasive and I think if I was to read this I would be drawn to Johns view
because of how he expresses the religious and health views which he is very
educated about which would draw me to believe him more. A very interesting statement John uses is 'its only a matter of time abortion could become illegal' the cliche being used means he thinks eventually abortion will become illegal. This is a strong view and because he is putting an opinion across without care it shows his beliefs are firm and because of his views and others that agree with him are right then its only a 'matter of time' others see this and it will become illegal.
I
am now going to analyse Lucy's blog next. Lucy's blog is written more
informally than Johns and I see a lack of successful use of punctuation in her
blog. Although above I have stated that i was drawn to Johns view more the fact
that Lucy has the experience of going through an abortion it helps her explain
her views because she has been through it not only physically but had to deal
with the controversy mentally. Because of this I can see why an audience may be
drawn to Lucy's view because its fact and the audience could feel an emotional
connection. She does show some good punctuation also. 'Abortion is murder' is it
really? If abortion is killing someone then why did I not get a jail sentence? The fact she uses rhetorical questions
shows she does know some good ways of persuasion and punctuation but in my
opinion it is overused which supports the fact John understands the use of
words more and what is best to do when expressing personal views. Lucy does
write in continuous pros as does John so it shows both have an understanding on
formatting their writing, yet because Lucy's
doesn’t seem to have the same academic level as Johns it becomes
irrelevant.
I
feel the primary purpose of John’s blog is to express his beliefs about
abortion and is looking to persuade his audience that his view is right and
should be accepted. This is the same as Lucy's primary purpose but she also
intends to share more of a personal experience with her audience as well as
expressing why discrimination to females having an abortion is wrong and how
she dealt with this as a 16 year old girl so she does show more of a personal
view than a knowledgeable one.
Good explanation of a specific context - you could take advantage of that more by talking about how different sub-audiences of local newspaper readers might feel about different quotes. I think different genders is an important consideration in how different audiences might react but religious views would also influence how the two pieces are read. Make sure when you have identified a technique and quoted (e.g. you say Amy uses some good punctuation) that you go on to pick out the relevant part(s) of the quote (e.g.punctuation) using relevant terminology (e.g. question mark) and show how it enhances what she is trying to say, linking in with purpose and audience and any other relevant aspects of the GRAPE. Some good thinking here and the beginnings of good analysis.
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